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Was reading my favorite Lawrence Ferlinghetti poem from A Coney Island of the Mind (number 9) which I'm just going to left justify and type out here

See
it was like this when
we waltz into this place
a couple of Papish cats
is doing an Aztec two-step
And I says
Dad let's cut
but then this dame
comes up behind me
and says
You and me could really exist
Wow i says
Only the next day
she had bad teeth
and really hates
poetry

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:iconfiniteincantatem:
Love this. That last line is perfect.

Also, great imagery for only using only so many words.

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sappy songs about sex and cheating
bland accounts of two lovers meeting
make me want to give mankind a beating
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that is one of my favorite Ferlinghetti poems. i haven't thought about him in a long time.

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If you can't laugh at yourself, you don't have the right to laugh at anyone else.
:iconmoeandcherrycoke:
=)
I like this.
liked it even more once I'd read the Lawrence Ferlinghetti poem.
very well done!

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even the garden of eden was just a big fancy cage.
:icondrunken-splice:
The Ferlinghetti poem is in the Artist Comments now, if you want to read that as well.

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Hello Toilet
`poisonedrose - thanks brett <£...ahhh brit love
:iconmoeandcherrycoke:
yours is better ;)

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even the garden of eden was just a big fancy cage.
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I might be choosin this one... I love it

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~ForTheLoveOfMusic - group, ROCK ON!
~fortheloveofwords - group, all submissions earn multiple critques/reviews!

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