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Preview image is Castillion's "Sunset with Moon" I was with her when she found out she had Wolff-Parkinson-White after she passed out completely out of the blue onto a slab of concrete. That night we slept together and woke up every hour to make sure she didn't damage herself further if she had had a concussion. With that though, I almost had the line be "the waves can only murmur/irregular as your heartbeat," but added the WPW to go with the extra descriptiveness, and yet I'm still on the fence if I like it in there or just "irregular as your heartbeat." Thoughts? Comments
 I'm not an expert, but it flows so well---it's beautiful!---and I think WPW stops the flow momentarily. It does go with the extra descriptiveness but I don't think it's needed in that line. I'll be curious to hear other opinions.
I think I agree with you. That's probably why I'm so uncertain about using it, because it feels like it's interrupting a bit...I'm still going to see what some of the other comments would be.
-- Hello Toilet `poisonedrose - thanks brett <£...ahhh brit love I thought about that too, by the way. When we're wondering if something should be removed, we already know the answer. (I hope everyone else agrees----hehe---just joking!)
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