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Lately I've been writing less narrative and more off the image. I have less stories to tell and more feel to expunge, perhaps.

Is it all too abstract? I guess in my head I understand the flow and connections, the meaning I meant behind everything. But if, as a reader, all you get is image and no correlation, I don't think I've succeeded.
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Orion159 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This was a good balance between being abstract and giving the reader enough pieces to create their own unique mental image.

Great job!
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nicholsjoseph22 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013
Excellent work.  Very compelling
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Ayior Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I can follow you very well in this (replying to your artists comment) and connect to what you are trying to say. Well, at least to whatever I make out of it.
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Madu-Chan Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautifully done! 
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congrats on the daily deviation! this has a wonderful flow. Heart 
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Tehya-Ninawi Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's beautiful. I love the Cummings style of verse, it works very well for this poem. I understand your connections in each stanza, but I have to admit the imagery is VERY powerful. I don't think it's too abstract, but I feel it should be (grounded?) a little more, maybe. The spacing and the way this is layered out gives it an almost drunken feel, like I'm staggering down the street at night, under streetlights and beside trash cans.

I had to read it again just to revel in the emotions it leaves behind. Congratulations on your DD, I can see it was well deserved.
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artistauncarton Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
I love your art you have you own personality keep going! :)
by the way this man have a riddle please help to find
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IridescentCatalyst Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
Congrats on the DD!
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ShonaliKapoor Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD, beautiful piece! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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